Your worse nightmare and your wildest sexual fantasy. All wrapped into one.
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Kent
Joined on 8/10/02
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Sentio
I like it so far, very descriptive and you have set the location and feel of the story nicely. Without saying too much you've given us a strong impression of the main character, and a couple of interesting side characters as well (I'm guessing Mrs Letviski is loosely based off another of the pictures).
All it needs now is a plot and a bit of direction. At the moment its a strong descriptive piece, but not really a story (though I confess my story was a little guilty of that as well), but I'm sure you have plans to rectify that as you continue (after all it is incomplete!). Good luck with the rest of your story!
SkeletonGimp
It's a story about every day life. His market stall is his life, so it's more a narrative about that. However, it's also meant to portray the underlying sense of dispair in modern day Russia. It's my critique on the broken soul of Russia translated through the lfie of a fictional character in a real town I've visited.